Only thing I disagreed totally with was where you sad magic had faded from the world. It hasnt its just people in general have focused so much on sience they dont pay attention to magic any more. Magic is just a much a part of nature as the air we breath. YOu just have to open your self up to it to realize its still there.
THAT what you just pointed out is being covered in a new chapter that im working on. keep an eye out :]
and by "totally disagree" do you mean to say you disagreed with everything? oh well if it isnt to your taste... i suppose that cant be helped. If I please the majority thats what counts.